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    Post by iKevinly on August 22nd 2011, 6:32 pm

    I Know

    I know a place where anger is shown.
    Where sadness cries,
    And men have grown.

    I know a person who visited this place,
    With anger in his eyes,
    And tears for a face.

    I know that this person was also very kind,
    Yet so very weak,
    In its poor mind.

    I know that this person is very confused,
    So very blind,
    Yet not bruised.

    I know that it had an arm with which it used to write,
    With which it used to type,
    With which it used to fight.

    I know that it had a choice of peace or to bleed,
    The colors of its pain,
    The colors of its deed.

    I know of this place where nothing is unknown,
    Where sadness cries,
    Where men have grown.

    I know that this person and this very place,
    Had congregated once,
    Had met face to face.

    I know that it clenched its fist and had so much rage,
    As it stared at this place,
    About to write it's new page.

    I know that it paused and thought about its life,
    Thought its kids,
    Thought about its wife.

    I know that it paused and thought about its past,
    Thought about its kids and wife,
    And the bomb blast.

    I know that it paused and relived a scene,
    Happiness over the summer,
    At fourteen.

    I know that it paused and relived a scene,
    Its sister's death,
    From a machine.

    I know that it paused and relived a scene,
    Running with friends,
    At fifteen.

    I know that it paused and relived a scene,
    Getting mugged at night,
    On sad Halloween.

    I know that it paused and relived a scene,
    Driving with friends,
    At seventeen.

    I know that it paused and relived a scene,
    Its friends moved on,
    At eighteen.

    . . .

    I know of a person and of a place,
    A wall and a man,
    Who met face to face.

    I know that this man had so much pain,
    Yet one thing I don't know,
    Is just his name.

    And here I lay in my peaceful room,
    One hand cracked and gone,
    Death coming soon.

    I just wish I knew his very name,
    As he broke the wall,
    As he smeared his pain.


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    Post by Sophie on August 22nd 2011, 7:05 pm

    Quite the dark poet, aren't you?

    Write something about rainbows next time, I dare you. AAAAARRRRGGGG

    Nice rhythm though, I really like the meter of the poem. You make free verse seem so easy!
    (You see what I did there? c:)


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    Post by iKevinly on August 22nd 2011, 7:27 pm

    Heh, rainbows?

    Challenge Accepted

    And thank for the compliment!
    And yes, I do see what you just did there. *clap clap*


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    Post by Sophie on August 22nd 2011, 7:29 pm

    And I eagerly await your next poem. Yay!

    Bro. AHAHAHAHAHA. OHOHOHOHO


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    Post by iKevinly on August 22nd 2011, 7:31 pm

    WHAT. AGH I HATE THE WORD BRO.


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    Post by Sophie on August 22nd 2011, 7:32 pm

    Yeh Bro? Orly? OHOHOHOHO


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    Post by Ketchup Girl on August 22nd 2011, 7:34 pm

    I totally agree with Sophie! Try writing something cheerful next time, I dare you!

    And while meter and rhythm are all fine and dandy, what really got me was the interesting rhythmic devices which seemed to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the Vogonity of the poet's compassionate soul, which contrives through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate this, transcend that, and come to terms with the fundamental dichotomies of the other, and one is left with a profound and vivid insight into whatever it was the poem was about!

    (... Anyone?)

    (Nobody caught the not-obscure reference? I copied an entire paragraph my hand for NOTHING?!) (rages at the heavens)


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    Post by Sophie on August 22nd 2011, 7:36 pm

    W-what did you just write? NO WAI


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    Post by iKevinly on August 22nd 2011, 7:37 pm



    I'm suddenly thinking that no one understood the poem.
    Oh Noes.

    "into whatever it was the poem was about!"

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    Post by Sophie on August 22nd 2011, 9:22 pm

    I have to admit, it was a tad bit harder to follow.
    I think it was because you had to simplify the sentences so much to fit the scheme of the poem, a lot of the literal meaning got cut out.

    I... I'm not that great at reading purely metaphors. Hard to explain...


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    Post by iKevinly on August 22nd 2011, 9:25 pm

    DX Wait,
    Honestly?

    It was harder to follow?
    Hm, I thought that this was 10 times more direct than the No Alarms and No Surprises one since you had to think about what the No Alarms and No Surprises scenario meant.

    XD And. . .
    Well,
    It's just strange you say that because I didn't leave out any literal meaning.

    In fact, 'annotating' this poem based on "What's literally happening?" would give you the answer to everything.

    The choice of to bleed or peace is found out later on about punching the place.
    "The Place" is referred to the Wall.
    The Person in this case can be inferred as the broken wrist bringer thing. :P


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    Post by Sophie on August 22nd 2011, 9:30 pm

    Oh!

    So, it's the speaker of the poem is actually 'the man'? And he's reminiscing about all of the things? And at the end he punched the wall and broke his hand?

    And... somehow he's dying from his broken hand? Oh, wait, death is coming to the hand?

    Sophie wrote:
    I... I'm not that great at reading purely metaphors. Hard to explain...

    I lied. I meant, I'm not good at looking purely at literal meanings. All the poems I read have deep undertones and metaphors! ;A;


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    Post by iKevinly on August 22nd 2011, 9:35 pm

    That just makes my poem look bad XD "All the poems I read have deep undertones and metaphors!"
    Ouch.

    :P

    The ending is up for you all to decide.
    Why isn't he remembering who punched it, if it was him?
    Why is he dying of a broken hand?

    It gets graphic.
    But in my mind,
    The anger was enough for him to keep smashing until blood was . . .
    Well, yep.


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