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    Hospitals [D]

    Post by Sophie on July 18th 2011, 2:38 am

    Since I think it's a bit redundant to have a new thread every day, I'll just keep on adding to this one.

    Feel free to comment here for ideas in general, or criticism about my writing.
    Comment on the actual story post for things pertaining to that specific chapter.

    Laeli is pronounced Lay-li. But I think Lay-ell-ee is pretty too~
    Heh, the magic of having unpronounceable names is that you're forced to make up one for yourself. xD

    Trivia:
    'Joy' in Latin is LAETITIA. (I get my names through odd processes.)

    Thanks!

    Day 18. Learning to Converse

    Yes, I am planning on having Matt die.
    Or would it be more interesting is Matt was the one to live, and Laeli died? Then, the last chapter could be in his POV...

    I haven't decided on illnesses yet.
    Anyone know any particularly deadly virus's?

    Ideas?


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    Post by iKevinly on July 18th 2011, 7:16 pm

    "It had been day 12 of her stay in the hospital."

    "So ended Day 19."
    ~~~

    D: I'm a bit confused on that but I'm sure I just read it wrong. ;)
    ALSO,
    OMG.
    YOUR NAMES.
    WTH.
    WHY.
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    SO.
    GOOD.
    -_- Makes me feel stupid for using Leo and Clara.
    I like Lions,
    And Clara was in Urban-Rivals so I used them. D:
    GRR.

    Anyways, I like it!! =] I REALLY do.
    But honestly, it's making me feel bad. :/ Your perfect writing and perfect grammar and use of SAT words makes me sad. :C

    :) KEEP IT UP.
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    ~Kev

    P.S.: I'd love to be moderator :( I really want a section in the Writings to be called, "Story Ideas"

    In which it's just like a pot of ideas that you don't want to write a story for, yet would make an awesome story. :) Thanks~
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    Post by Sophie on July 19th 2011, 1:43 am

    I actually meant it to be:

    She had stayed in the hospital for 12 days.
    She had 19 days left to live?

    Hmm, is it unclear?
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    Post by iKevinly on July 19th 2011, 3:08 am

    OH I GET IT NOW :DDD
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    Post by ZeroCyanide on July 19th 2011, 3:39 pm

    Sophie wrote:I actually meant it to be:

    She had stayed in the hospital for 12 days.
    She had 19 days left to live?

    Hmm, is it unclear?

    Yeah, it actually was kind of unclear. But thanks for clearing that up!
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    Post by Ketchup Girl on July 20th 2011, 7:06 pm


    *RUDELY INTRUDES, A DAY OR TWO LATE*

    Well, I like it. (WILL LILLY DIE?) (I'm renaming her "Lilly" because every time "Laeli" comes up I stop reading and think, "HOW THE HELL DO I PRONOUNCE THAT?" But weird names are all part of your Sophie-ness and so I'll shut up now.)
    I like this Matt person, is he terminally ill, too? And what is Lilly dying from, anyway? I know you probably mentioned it in the story but I didn't really catch it because I suck at reading.

    WRITE SOME MORE CHAPTERS. I'm waiting for Lilly to die.

    -M

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    Post by ZeroCyanide on July 20th 2011, 9:51 pm

    Oh, I read it as Lay-ell-ee.
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    Post by iKevinly on July 21st 2011, 12:03 am

    Oh, I read everything as Lashen now.
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    Post by Sophie on July 21st 2011, 12:09 am

    You really like that name, don't you.
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    Post by iKevinly on July 21st 2011, 12:14 am

    It's the perfect name. For some reason, it reminds me of courage as well as traits of a lion more than Leo.
    Oh god.
    Lashen = my adopted child's name.
    Hands down.
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    Post by Sophie on July 21st 2011, 12:15 am

    What.

    I... I'm happy you like it that much.
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    Post by iKevinly on July 21st 2011, 12:16 am

    =)
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    Post by Sophie on August 2nd 2011, 5:01 pm

    Geh.

    I just finished the six page story line.
    Well... at least I know how it ends now.

    SO LONG OMG. :NO:

    I'M ALL DEPRESSED NOW BECAUSE OF ALL THE DEATH AND TEARS. D:<

    SOMEONE CHEER ME UP PLZ. I\'m sorry.


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    Post by iKevinly on August 2nd 2011, 5:05 pm

    XD Yay for Sophie!
    Oh god. . . That reminds me of One More Time ,_, gotta get writing.
    HURRY POST THE STORY SOPHIE


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    Post by Sophie on August 2nd 2011, 5:07 pm

    Nope, not posting the story line. You'll have to wait for it as it comes out chapter by chapter~~

    (The last four chapters are pretty awesome, if I do say so myself. OHOHOHOHOHO)


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    Post by iKevinly on August 2nd 2011, 5:21 pm

    :D Ahahaha ! That's so coool :D Okay okay we'll wait T_T
    . . . .D= Waiting


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    Post by Ketchup Girl on August 2nd 2011, 10:03 pm

    I know I am way too late in writing this, but I TOTALLY KNOW A DEADLY VIRUS FOR MATT-DUDE!

    MAD COW DISEASE!

    Yeah! He could have totally eaten some contaminated beef as a middle-schooler, and that explains his mysterious vegetarianism! (He's a vegetarian, right?) But no amount of tofu and organic soymilk will save him from the throes of the deadly bovine menace! ALAS!

    Or maybe Salmonella. It has a cool name.
    (YOU SHOULD NAME ONE OF YOUR CHARACTERS "SALMONELLA", SOPHIE, JUST SAYING.)

    (I was going to say "AIDS" but then I realized that that wasn't really something to joke about.)
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    Post by iKevinly on August 2nd 2011, 10:09 pm

    Ketchup Girl wrote:I know I am way too late in writing this, but I TOTALLY KNOW A DEADLY VIRUS FOR MATT-DUDE!

    MAD COW DISEASE!

    Yeah! He could have totally eaten some contaminated beef as a middle-schooler, and that explains his mysterious vegetarianism! (He's a vegetarian, right?) But no amount of tofu and organic soymilk will save him from the throes of the deadly bovine menace! ALAS!

    Or maybe Salmonella. It has a cool name.
    (YOU SHOULD NAME ONE OF YOUR CHARACTERS "SALMONELLA", SOPHIE, JUST SAYING.)

    (I was going to say "AIDS" but then I realized that that wasn't really something to joke about.)

    Ketchup Girl wrote:
    Or maybe Salmonella. It has a cool name.
    (YOU SHOULD NAME ONE OF YOUR CHARACTERS "SALMONELLA", SOPHIE, JUST SAYING.)


    Ketchup Girl wrote:
    (YOU SHOULD NAME ONE OF YOUR CHARACTERS "SALMONELLA", SOPHIE, JUST SAYING.)


    Ketchup Girl wrote:
    (YOU SHOULD NAME


    Ketchup Girl wrote:
    NAME

    Lashen?


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    Post by Sophie on August 2nd 2011, 10:12 pm

    LOL

    (Nah, I've already come up with a disease! Plasma cell leukemia!)
    (Aha~ In the next story I'll name somebody after salmonella. xD)
    (Matt's going to die. Oh noes. </3 )


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    Post by poetryinmotion on September 5th 2011, 10:25 pm

    Sophie! You must update!
    And I figure the story has more impact if the character who was so optomistic dies while the pesimist changes her outlook on life and gets to keep on living. Although...the first book she was reading was Romeo and Juliet.....

    (I realize I haven't commented on your story before - sorry about that, but it is really really really great. Please commit to finishing it!)
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    Post by Aulina16 on September 5th 2011, 11:07 pm

    I agree with Elayna......I love your story....but I love romance in general.....hint hint sophie You know you want to
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    Post by Sophie on September 6th 2011, 5:54 pm

    Haha~
    I didn't think anyone was still reading this story. <3

    But yes! I'll finish it! Aww...

    And romance? Maaaaybe there's something there. I'm not sure yet. Yay!


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    Post by Aulina16 on September 8th 2011, 1:17 am

    SOPHIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IT'S SAD :( BUT ITS GOOD :D BUT ITS SAD :( BUT ITS STILL GOOD :D ......CONFLICTING EMOTIONS......

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